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kurara3 2006-12-18 ch 24,	abuseomg that was so sad. i was hoping it would get alittle better at the end but ya. not that it wasn't a good story just a bit on the sad side though.
Lily 2006-11-02 ch 24, anon.	abuseI thought this story was good, in the beginning. But some parts or some chapters could've been taken off and nothing would be missing. It was really draggy which is why it got boring near the middle/end. The ending wasn't so good, there was barely any conclusion to it. Although it was supposed to be like that.. You've improved a lot comparing this to your more recent fics.
For What Its Worth 2006-10-07 ch 24,	abuseYou're right, that is an ambiguous ending. It makes me feel like it's the first book of a trilogy. And it would make a good first book. If there was a sequel,I would definitely read it...(hint,hint).Na3meh
wanderingnachos 2006-08-29 ch 24,	abuseFirst of all, I liked your background for your story. It was about something really serious and there's not a lot of stories about racism on the Internet. But I'm afraid your story left me pretty disappointed. For one, you introduced the problem of racism, but never resolved it in your story. Maybe its hard to resolve racism too quickly, yeah, but at least give some developments or closure. What disappointed me the most was that this story was mostly about their relationships with others--not that its a bad thing, but since your background is about racism and your characters working for different organizations, shouldn't you stress what revelations they go through? I kept reading in hopes that something would happen, something political that would solve the problem, but what I got instead were Jack's love life problems, which I found highly irrelevant. Jack's characterization was particularly contradicting. He got to be head of LAFFAT, but I see no reason WHY. In his pov's what struck me most was the importance he placed on girls and on his own status. How is does this support his appointment? A point I found highly unlikely and unconvincing was Lia's attitude and her constant immature conversations with Cal. she's in a rebel association! It should mean secrecy and maturity to handle situations. Instead, every other character has to put up with her mood swings and constant complaints. In all honesty, I think she is better suited for a high school background. She is constantly driven to take missions and complete them, but her attitude is very off-putting and could/does lead to failure and no more missions. Contradictory character, major flaw of not thinking of others has not really changed at the end, excepting her new awareness of Carmon's feelings. Lia and Jack's relationship could have been MUCH more deeply explored. After all, it is in your summary and you should have taken the time to show readers something more. They finally met near the end--which I found most disappointing. The plot, to me, was pointless. Lia's parents die, she joins a rebel group, and then she dies a rebel. Jack struggles with his relationships with girl as well as his job, and then he realizes he is Jessica's dog. I read for the hopes of further development in racism, some solution, but there was none. I'm sorry if this review is harsh, but these are my true views on this story. I think it could be really, really good, but the style you wrote in (long conversation, just dialogue) is much better suited to a high school romance of some sort, not a story about racism and loss.
Dot Cubed 2006-04-05 ch 24, anon.	abuseThat seemed too short to wrap up the whole thing. And I was hoping for more interaction from Lia and Jack...but I like it anyway. It leaves a lot up to the reader, 'causes me think. I liked this a lot, and I'm mad at myself for not finding it until now. (I never know how to end these things)
Dot Cubed 2006-04-05 ch 19, anon.	abuseThat first section? so ironic. Nice touch, seriously. OMG WHICH ONE OF THEM GOT SHOT. I swear, if Lia kills her brother or Melan I will be so mad. clicks that next button (it's so nice reading this without having to wait in suspense, haha)
Dot Cubed 2006-04-04 ch 17, anon.	abuseI was fond of Lacey!! Whoever did that to her is so dead, seriously, 'cause Lacey was cool. And it means that we don't get closure on the Jude-Lacey-Leigh love triangle. That's really upsetting. Cal and Lia together? make me happy. Who was Andy, though?
Dot Cubed 2006-04-04 ch 15, anon.	abuseHow could you hate this chapter? It is officially my favorite one out of the ones I've read so far. I could go and list why, but I'm not all that good at reviews, which is why I don't do them all that often. Anyway, I so thought they were going to have to assasinate Jack. I so did. clicks the next button
Doray 2006-03-31 ch 24,	abuseHi Nafeesah! You know that I totally adore this story. That is why I seem to read it so thoroughly. I never reread, but I remember details because your style sticks them to my mind. You have always been clever, thankyouverymuch. Christmas present . . . I just need so much love and support right now because things are unexpectedly tough. Just being there for me would be enough. Hey, rhymerhyme! Congratulations for finishing this, btw. Although I didn't exactly see any part (all chapters included) wherein the preview would fit. "She new she had no chance." Typo, dear. (KnewKnew) I loved Lia's reflections. They were so intense yet very light to read at the same time. Cal misses Lia . . . :D I absolutely liked the "grassy" flashback. :P The potrayal of Jack was truly nice. He seemed more realistic than ever. Sometimes, I love open endings. Especially when they are a bit predictable. Love ya! Paalam (for now). ~Doray
she's not breathing 2006-03-26 ch 1,	abusei know what i've done. =) you know how much i think. plz just know i do it for you because i love you & i don't want you to end up like me. i just went "somewhere" & they said things. yes. i do love you. & even if you hate me forever about this you have every right love & i'll be okay cause i know i did the right thing. ~kait
aiur 2006-03-19 ch 24,	abuseum. pst. iloveit. writing is about growth, isn't it? haha. &, dear, you've grown. unbelievably much. you can tell simply from reading this chapter. i applaud you for finishing it. honestly. what a relief. & brilliant writing. & wowwow. haha. hearts. ~kait
hatespinnerbait 2006-03-09 ch 23,	abuseoh boo...i finally noticed that you updated,and that's the ending i get... grr! update soon!
mina 2006-03-01 ch 23, anon.	abuseWell, I was pretty surprised when I stumbled on your story. I like it a lot. But when I got to this chapter, I was pretty surprised that there were no reviews for the last chapter? So, I'm reviewing at least one. (couldnt review the others because I'm running short on time and practically skimming but I'll read them again when I get the chance) Just one really, really lame question. What are Cadlians and Elonsicans? I know it's incredibly lame of me to ask, but I think I skipped out somewhere (courtesy of my skimming). All I know is that it's a race.
Death Princess 2006-02-19 ch 23,	abuseyou SCUMBAG! i am gunna kick ur **! how cud u?
Yisa 2006-02-12 ch 23,	abuseman blinks um...next? lol, just enjoying myself...damn :) that's a compliment, i'm speechless...

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