to suffocate or to save
-- loved that line

Simple and sweet- and the payload: "to suffocate or to save" wraps it up quite nicely.

Wow, not what I was expecting. Very Ponder-some.

Hey Jaclyn! It's been a while, but I still like your writing. Actually, this poem isn't my favourite, though I really, really like the first part ("i would like to / title this poem / you and the sky // but what will i / speak of?"). After that, it sorta kinda fails to keep my attention (you always had a way with images, but the second part just doesn't do it for me, you know? it's more two-dimensional than I'm used to).

beautiful. I loved it. nice rhythm and imagery- awesome diction.

Ouh, I liked that