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Reviews For: Broken Memories

Just Jenita 2005-05-30 ch 2,	OMG! The link is going to break, isn't it? BROKEN MEMORIES! The French evil guy thing is a bit old though... ~j
Just Jenita 2005-05-26 ch 1,	fascinating concept supported with science. I know I could never manage to write something of this sort, it requires too much science and stuff...The one thing I cant' understand though is why no one found a way to power the cars... Don't they have like, hydroelectric cars nowdays? What about other substances? Can't cars like, run off of alcohol or something? heard that somewhere once... I understand where it might be essential to the story, but still... Very nice, though, I really like it can't wait to read more!~j
Angel Elizabeth 2005-05-14 ch 3,	Whoa. Thats all I can manage right now. Just whoa. Please continue! Very awesome story. I like the idea of transporting through a telephone booth. Keep it up. Watch your spelling in some places! ~Angel
Lance Cortex 2005-03-02 ch 3,	It looks as though things are beginning to pick up now. Hopefully this is the part of the story that the reader can really sink his/her teeth into, right? I guess I'll just have to wait and see, though. Ah, gotta love all those details. Good work with that. Keep it up :)
Xechs Marquise 2005-02-25 ch 3,	It's pretty good so. Though it is lacking abit in plot description, but isn't that what makes a good mystery? Well anyway I like it so far and I'll keep reading, but I have a question for you. How often do you update this story? Is it weekly or bi-weekly, cause I'll read the chapters as they come in then. But if it isn't but like every month or two, I'd rather wait for a few chapters to come out and review them as a whole, instead of individually. Oh and if you do answer my questions please send them to xechs_195ac@yahoo.com Thank you, Xechs Marquise
Lance Cortex 2005-02-05 ch 2,	You know I can't resist a good science fiction romp :) I think you have a very appealing story here. The futuristic environment is interesting enough to hold the interest of the reader, and the background story is very unique. I especially enjoy the addition of The Link, which I'm sure is going to play a major part in the story sometime soon. Good idea there. Constructive criticism time: while your story about Phoenix rising to power was very interesting and inclusive, I can't help but feel like now wasn't a good time to get into it. The story is still new and character development is the aspect that should probably be dealt with before the reader is presented with a great deal of history. I find myself wishing I knew more about Ramone and her personality before her capture takes place; if we can sympathize with her, then her abduction will have more impact. Sorry, I don't mean to sound critical. I love this story and I see that it has a great deal of potential; I just hate to see the quality become diluted by minor little mistakes. I guess I'm just trying to say that your story is good, but with a little polish, it will be great. Keep up the good work.
Michael Dempsey 2005-01-03 ch 1,	I'm not exaggerating when I say WOW! That's a cool opening to a story. I'm fascinated by 'The Link'. It would be quite handy to have one. Also it's a good message about burning fossil fuels.The action part is brilliant, and I love the tension right at the end. Write more please!

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