Reviews for Long I Have Wandered

Carnal-Rhapsody
2005-01-13
ch 1,

Beautifully poignant...I keenly feel the soldier's desire for his beloved and his weariness of battle and war. The way you've written the lines is wonderful and flows very nicely.

The only thing I'd suggest is a slight modification of the following line from:

"But ringing of thy sweet voice is not mine to hear."

To:

"But the ringing of thy sweet voice is not mine to hear."

That little word "the" would help that line to flow better and will also make it more grammatically correct. But as always, you are the author. ^_^

Great job!

~CR

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