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| addie pray 2005-04-20 ch 1,  | abuseHmm. I really enjoyed the mythical, ancient tone of this. Usually I despise it. Let's see. Critism: I realize that this is supposed to be mythical, but some of the purposely ancient spelling didn't fit well (crumpl'd, bubb'ling). Also, the repetition of "Had I the power" works really well, but the repetition of "I'm just me" didn't really fit. I love the ending to this -- really strong and beautiful. Well done poem. |