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| atreyu love 2007-01-05 ch 4,  | abusereally. why arent there updates? lol |
| Kaori-Angel 2006-12-19 ch 4, | abusePlease update this story as soon as you can, I wanna see what happens. |
| Cocokitty 2006-08-05 ch 5, | abusei like it |
| Nekomaru 2006-04-27 ch 1, | abuseCool! This is ironic. I used to have a story called MoonRiders and it was something like this. Don't worry, I'm not stealing anyone's ideas; I'm a good girl. ^^. But a bit of advice (I don't know if this would work for you but I got it from my 4th grade teacher some years ago): Try to use less dialogue and more action! Check and Chat playaz! :3 |
| s... 2006-03-27 ch 5, anon. | abusehey i really like this story why did you stop? is it writers block...work...don't give up too fast your really good at this writing thing. what happens next? |
| evil-kenshin 2006-02-25 ch 5, | abusegood to see your continuing it, good story so far, didn't review it the first time i read it ages ago, but of course i am now |
| MarshmellowParis 2006-02-08 ch 4, | abuseGood story! I did find a lot of mistakes, maybe you should read through your writing before you post. |
| JMJones 2005-12-02 ch 4, | abuseGood job, continue writing ^_^ |
| Boogyoogy 2005-09-25 ch 5, | abusevery good PLEASE continue |
| Boogyoogy 2005-09-25 ch 2, | abusevery good kinda obvious what it is but for the stupid ppl out ther i wont say anything lol |
| Alonelyhawk 2005-08-17 ch 5, | abuseWonderful plot it is going really good, please write more i would like to see how it goes |
| xSansai 2005-04-29 ch 1, | abusewow, this one is great, kudos to you, It just keeps building suspense ^^ |
| la petite malaine 2005-04-27 ch 5, anon. | abuseNice. Very nice. In fact, I may be motivated to say it was hella nice. Short but sweet %^)On critique I only want to mention that you may want to stay with the opening confusion for a while and set scene, mis en place and such, just to give an idea of the suroundings. Just think "I woke up in a strange bed, what do I see." Blanket? Is she tucked in? that kind of ting. Also there werre some typo's and spelling mistakes that a computer may not have cought like "a wake" which is "awake" and some work in the tenses that I am certain were only speed errors.Lovely,Malaine |
| Tenshistar 2005-04-24 ch 4, | abusei like it. i hope you update again soon. |
| la malaine 2005-03-31 ch 4, anon. | abuse*cough, cough*more please...%^)You know you want to satisfy me%^}Come on... everybody is doing it %^>%^`I swear, I meant that to sound rediculous... I already told you aout editin but that happens to everybody and my stuff is usually riddled with rediculously bizarre accidents so -rock-rock on! |