really. why arent there updates? lol

Please update this story as soon as you can, I wanna see what happens.

i like it

Cool! This is ironic. I used to have a story called MoonRiders and it was something like this. Don't worry, I'm not stealing anyone's ideas; I'm a good girl. ^^. But a bit of advice (I don't know if this would work for you but I got it from my 4th grade teacher some years ago): Try to use less dialogue and more action!

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hey i really like this story why did you stop? is it writers block...work...don't give up too fast your really good at this writing thing. what happens next?

good to see your continuing it, good story so far, didn't review it the first time i read it ages ago, but of course i am now

Good story! I did find a lot of mistakes, maybe you should read through your writing before you post.

Good job, continue writing ^_^

very good PLEASE continue

very good kinda obvious what it is but for the stupid ppl out ther i wont say anything lol

Wonderful plot it is going really good, please write more i would like to see how it goes

wow, this one is great, kudos to you, It just keeps building suspense ^^

Nice. Very nice. In fact, I may be motivated to say it was hella nice. Short but sweet %^)On critique I only want to mention that you may want to stay with the opening confusion for a while and set scene, mis en place and such, just to give an idea of the suroundings. Just think "I woke up in a strange bed, what do I see." Blanket? Is she tucked in? that kind of ting. Also there werre some typo's and spelling mistakes that a computer may not have cought like "a wake" which is "awake" and some work in the tenses that I am certain were only speed errors.Lovely,Malaine

i like it. i hope you update again soon.

*cough, cough*more please...%^)You know you want to satisfy me%^}Come on... everybody is doing it %^>%^`I swear, I meant that to sound rediculous... I already told you aout editin but that happens to everybody and my stuff is usually riddled with rediculously bizarre accidents so -rock-rock on!