This is a lot like Langston Hughes- he wrote a poem called What Happens To A Dream Deprived. But you made it original and put your touch on it- I like this.

This looks familiar...oh, yes, I remember now:What Happens to a Dream Deferred?Was this a school project? Anyways, it's pretty good, it has some really great images. Keep up the great work.

Love the last stanza. Splendid.

i liked this, the use of language. format from 'a dream deferred' by robert frost perhaps? seems so. i like that poem (actually i've used it for inspiration once.) good job :)

--this is jackie again, ashliegh's friend. of course ash is gone somewhere and all of us in VA left stunned in the dust, but she's still in our hearts...--

Beautifully written, I love this one so much. It askes questions that most people ask at some point and gives some suggestions. I love the way that you approached this.

Keep it up.

A deprived soul; it's like denying a dying man his last peck of water or an asthmatic air. Funny I should mention this, but Mr. Hughes (disntinguished as he was and daringly independent for his time--he established his identity independant of both color and creed) reasoned that he subconciously wanted to write as a white writer. I believed this was one his punch-lines from an essay, 'we would or who would surrender racial pride in the name of a false integration'. Brilliantly formulated CC!

it is very good! I like it a lot. The metaphores and things. Oh and the author is langston hughes and the poem is called dream deferred. I a favorite poem of mine. but anyway great job!

Wow! This is an AWESOME poem! Very good!