I loved it! Keep on writting!

"Keep 'em coming, bruises fade"

I loved that line, it's definitely a strong one not only in meaning, but in wording.

Everybody has felt this way at some point or another - I can certainly relate to this, and I love reading about what I can connect with. Overall, terrific job, keep writing.

aw, what a beautiful poem...but sad...like how you really want to get away from this messed/screwed up world.

i really liked these lines:"Struggling to stay above the waterMinutes pass my strength soon fadesAs I drift below the surface"

good job!! ^_^