Wow...beautiful. You can really feel her pain, although I don't really get waht's going on. It's still beautiful though. And I love that last line. Really hits you hard how all he cares about is his stained carpet. Hope someone at the cleaners asks about the blood and he gets arrested or something.

...what a prick. At least do something with the body! Jeez, why didn't they just rent a steam cleaner? It would've came out...eventually.

(Great job, I love your works!)

Masochist Maxwell

Wow...this is extremily powerful. The black stare, the begging for help. The last line hits you like a bullet to the hard. Superb job. Keep it up!Hawke

i guess in this world people are nothing but ignorant to other peoples pain, even if they could save there life, but i love this coz you really get the feelings down well and the emotions protrayed are very well done, loved it can relate in a strange way. lots of love AllyCred

undiscribably magnificent keep writing!

Hey there again...

Again, this is a great poem. Always give excellent ideas and thoughts in your poems. This portrays the effect of how there are cold hearted people in the world that would leave people for dead.

Wow...you can really feel the anger of being ignored when you need help.