Wow, this is awesome! I love the short lines; they add emphasis to the poem, highlighting that every single part is just as important as the next. The last 4 lines really stand out - "Time will reveal / What's meant to be, / A fated loss / Or destiny..." - so beautiful! Keep it up!

-ShadowNemesis

one of the first poems i've ever seen from you. i think it's very good, it rhymes well and flows smoothly...

and right now i don't like capitalizing my i's -.-;;

well, need to go..i'm in school now. love much, bye =)

a ture writer is one who manages to put into words exactly what others feel regardless of whether or not they've met them.

you are a true writer.

Beautiful. Makes me think of how I feel about a certain someone.

Cool format. And Happy Birthday in advance! hehe... my birthday's 2 days before yours so i'll remember you.

I like how each line goes longer than the last for a while, then shorter... I don't know if you meant to do that, but it's a cool format. Good writing though.