A poem about the war that isn't full of 'dubbya is an idiot ha ha ha!' or 'let's kill sum a'rabs!'? The world sorely needs more perspectives like yours. Intensely vivid in communicating the chaos and various emotions of war. Very much appreciated the last stanza,(at least as I interpreted it) since much anti-war poetry and discussion fails to acknowledge the naive and selfish idealism that has always been part of war - that is, the idea that to kill can be a pure, glorious, life-affirming act. Everyone who glorifies war repeats it, either implicitly or explicitly, and it kind of drives me mad.

another amazing piece. awesome structure. nice rhythm and rhyme in this also, gives it a nice flow. i love the ending. this is a beautiful heartrending piece. your writing is awesome. ^_^ nice quote too. so true.

I love your use italics/plain text. I could really hear the two different voices of this poem in my mind. Part of me wants to memorize this poem and keep on reciting it to myself when I'm thinking about these endless wars...

really interesting, and always different and unique, as I've come to expect :). Wonderful workd my friend

Hello hello to a fellow Canuck. *Following review may be slightly bias based on shared nationality*

Just kidding. Good work though, seriously. I really liked the italics, kept me reading. You have definite raw talent. I like it.

ELise

M...I LOVE this! Your poetry is the best, I swear...and I watched Apocalypse Now last night, so this really matches my current mood! Awesome...brilliant! I love this line "you swore you’d be a hero one day—to follow and obey—predator and prey" awesome! Write more soon! Love, Mia