very raw. Swearing bugs me, particularly in poetry, so i'll leave it at that.

this is really good _

Argh, dont believe i forgot to review this one. Ooh...powerful alright and very well written. Yes i definately hope that tis isn't ture, but anyway, i love you-Keith Andrew

I can totally relate. I don't like my dad much either. He doesn't hurt me, but he doesn't repect me either. He's the yelling type. Anyway, I know how you feel and I sympathize. It's good to get your feelings out. I like the deep, raw

i can relate to so many lines in this, i honestly love it. please keep writing. all my love, shadowed mind

Raw emotion there, I can't relate to that kind of physical abuse but the general theme is still there. And you have every right to feel this way.

Keep it up.

i like this.. a lot. maybe i'll show it to dad someday, lol. or maybe not.. but seriously, this is really good, the word flow is magnificent, as always. and just so i can sontinue to live in peace, this is just fiction, right? and if it isn't, why didn't you tell me? you know i'm always here.. llove you! lots of love, zai

powerful... i wouldn't know about the dad shit but my mom was the same way. it bites. although i always forgave her... -le sigh-

Nice, i like it a lot :)

reminds me of a friend of mine. thats such a sad poem, it shows so much emotion, its beautiful in a slightly frightening, raw way. love it!

Han.