Whoa, this was really beautiful and scary. I loved how you encorporated the phrase "cobweb lace" twice for different things. The imagery of the flames eating the palace and the fear in the girl is great, and the description of the place is vivid: I can imagine it perfectly.

Great diction and symbolism. You're a great writer and I love your poems. Please write more and I'll read more. And thank you for the review and the next chapter will be put up tonight.