“Cedar Springs, MI,” Mark answered for them.

I think you just told us where you were from =).

This story is just the right amount of weird space aliens and teenage lust for adventure. Well done!

I do have one nitpick though. You said one of the boys' father was on the ship where everyone died. I think that would probably bother him a bit after the captain told them so. Unless you meant his father was part of the chief command. In which case--never mind.

I have a space trip gone wrong story too! It's called All I Wanted Was a Vacation. Check it out if you get a chance =).

haha. cute story! i like the lightheartedness. my favorite was the last line - it brings it all down to earth again. *hey! a pun! of sorts!* it was a little "telly" but i'm pretty sure this is just for entertainment, so it's fine. good job! :)

Haha, what a spring of imagination. This was a little humerous to me and was fun to read the whole way through. Only one little note I have for you-- Have you ever thought of varying your sentence structure? I think this wasn't present more in the beginning-- and it's nothing too major, I liked your story just thought you'd want to think about it.

I've never really written a story on space because i've thought it'd be pretty hard, yet I read stuff like Hitchhikers guide and such. mm.. I should probably try and write some. Unfortunatly I got a new computer and still need to transfer all my old files and such -.- so I wont have anything up for a while..plus I have exams next week ew

keep it up though ^-^ I'd love to read more of your works.

xxMornieUtule

Woah, I love it! Good job. It has a great plot, you could elaborate more with details and a different ending ( capture by a large group of Bear-like aliens, prehaps?) if you wanted to make it a novel, opposed to a short story.