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| Alexis Albery 2007-03-01 ch 1,  | abuseNicely done, I like the theme. Very well constructed piece. |
| AK the Twilight 2006-11-09 ch 1, | abuseInteresting word choice, although it does sound a bit like rambling in the beginning. At the conclusion, though, it is some extremely well done use of metaphor. Overall, great job. Just try to make the beginning flow a bit better. |
| InkandIntrospection 2006-08-22 ch 1, | abuseI really like how the way this is written is kind of disjointed, like the way you think when you're half-asleep, thoughts floating everywhere. Very well-written. |
| UnAble and UnHeaRd 2006-07-09 ch 1, | abuseI really like this poem, You should try your hand at writing some more. ^^ ~ Lor Lor |
| leylakedi 2006-01-29 ch 1, | abuseI like this piece. The lines are direct and powerful; they seem like they're coming straight from the heart. My favorite line was: "My tank is on empty, so I continue to roll downhill" Nice job! -L-P.S. Thanks for the review! |
| mehlisha 2006-01-22 ch 1, | abuseYou scratch my back, I'll scratch yours. Thanks for your review! This poem is great, it's very sweet and well written. Keep up the good work! |
| ashley m.c 2006-01-22 ch 1, | abuseThe poem doesn't give a lot of imagery and I think the feelings are too splayed out (you said you could take critiim; I hope you weren't lying beause I'd at least like to live until twenty-four) |
| x-XSirenX-x 2005-11-07 ch 1, | abusewow, it's great! Nicely written! |
| Air Rey 2005-09-04 ch 1, | abuseI don't want to say any other thing about this, but amazing...i dont want to ruin such great work...hope you could share a few of your insights about the rest of my works...keep it up... |
| inquistrix 2005-01-09 ch 1, | abusenice work. effective last line.check my stuff out if you've got the timeinzaniti |