awesome piece. beautifully written, i love the format, with the italics and slashes. they really add to this. it's good that you are conveying these emotions through imagery. :)

Praise: You have no idea how much this amazed me. The poem was so deep and seemed so personal. ^-^ It spoke volumes yet it tenderly spoke , almost afraid to say...sorry if that made no sense.

Critism: -.- None. ^^;

~* Noelle O.O;V *~

Powerful and beautifully written, so sad. I like your images.

that's some great imagery there. good job. keep writing =0)

That's great! I've never seen something written like that I don't think. Maybe I'll give it a try sometime. =D

Ahh...I can so sadly relate to this, and it's beautiful, and certainly amazing, seeing as your imagery managed to portray my feelings sometimes, and certainly a lot of others'. Wonderful, stunning haiku! Love it! Mia

expressive & well-done. loved the images.

cheers- lin

Beautifully morbid. I actually loved the format and how the two intertwined to make a great piece of writing. Very nice job. And your right, you dont have to be suicidal to write on death and suidcide...everyone thinks about it at one time or another...its inevitable. Great piece.