you know...she seems to take this all really well really fast..she also seems to agree a bit too easily (maybe it's just me, but I'd be slightly suspicious if someone told me about a war I never knew existed). And maybe this is just me, but I think it might have helped things if you had hinted at her having a sister before. But I have to ask, how did she explain her sister's death to her parents? Cause it couldn't have looked at all natural, but perhaps that's just me. Anyway, it will be very interesting to see where this goes. :)

ohh, nice ending! I'm surprised she didn't get apprenticed to mr hates-her-so-much-and-keeps-giving-her-detention, but I'm glad she didn't :D It will be very interesting to see what happens next, that's for sure!

not bad, not bad, you seem to be deviating a bit from the HP feel now, but I'd suggest going further, but that's just me :)BTW, the burning paper, brilliant :)

Pretty good story so far, a bit choppy, but meh.

Oh, say, I have a question, but lesse, how to put this so it doesn't sound like an insult...oh well, I'll just have to come out and say it, I don't know how else to put it, sorry. You can smite me later if need be.

Did you mean for this story to sound so much like HP?