Characters with minds of their own, eh? Then this SHOULD be a good story!!

You have a great choice in wording. However, you need to use more commas. I'm told I have that problem, too... *shrug*

Keep writing!!~Annie

wow, i really liked this. please contintue. the end was kinda confusing, but i guess the humor is needed. the decription in the beginning really sets an appropriate mood.