Beautiful. It's what free-style poetry should be. I'd pick a few favorite lines, but they're all so wonderful that I can't decide. I wish I had some constructive critism for this, but I can't see a single thing in need of revision. Keep it up.

I appreciate the review, as always. You are far too kind; my poetry isn't all that great. I much prefer the medium of short story. But if you feel the need to talk to me, my AIM screen name is stilcantflipturn.

Very Pretty indeed. And it's true, and it's very cool how you captured the moment. XD

you are rather good. GO VEGETARIANS! lol. sorry, couldn't help it after seeing ur bio.

i like how this poem flows.

~SP

Interesting poem with an original concept...It raised alot of questions...like if humanity (feelings) is a problem or a solution to problems, etc...great poem! keep writing!

i like it. it is very absract the way you have looked at htis situation. you have said we know what the why is, but you just have to figure out where the why is. hm. this poem is very cleverly written, i like it, well done. i'm going to read more!...ash

Interesting way of looking at things. I've always had a soft spot for these sort of stream-of-consciousness poems. The thing is, they tend to be cliche (and I say this having written some of the most cliche poems around). Try to make it more original in the idea stage--try giving it an original slant or something like that to make it unique and truly your own.

And no, I don't feel particularly sorry for the shark... I figure any fish that can chase down a motorboat has got the balls to stand a little horrific disfigurement. And honestly, he didn't seem to mind.:)

~He Who Walks On All Fours

Helloo, 'tis me, Sada, the strange greek-lover person on GreekBoy's page, and i just wanted to review a story of yours..

This is pretty good, i like the last line the most for some reason...ah well, your writingts are a lot better than mine, so kudos to you! Hehe

^-^ Well done !! Keep up the good work !!

~* Noelle *~

Where the why is… Is there truly a reason for anything? It makes you wonder… ~ Odyssey2469

P.S. Thanks for the reviews

I like it except, dieing isn't defeating you. It's defeating life, sorrow, being captured and put in a place ythat you don't want to be. Death is the best thing in life there is to me.