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| INTP 2005-03-12 ch 1, | The structure and technique you used here really express the turbulent emotions that love has the power to compel of its victims. I've noticed a theme of disillusionment throughout your poems with your inveterate acquaintance--love. I'm actually rather jealous of your familiarity with it; you write as if love is the marrow of your soul, and you speak of it with such poetic maturity that you obviously are accustomed to its presence in your life. |
| shawna 2005-01-16 ch 1, | your right it's not your usual style but it's quite good and i think the way you repeated the word from the end of one line to the beging of the other really tied everything together nicely and made it all flow together you made a great point and discribed love perfectly the ups and downs i love it! lol tho i'm no great expert lol |
| the cereal killer 2005-01-15 ch 1, | I enjoyed that. Your choice of words is very smart. I liked how they linked and how they were placed inside of the parentheses; but my favorite part was the lines that weren't. I don't think it was very helpful placing "Are the" and "courses of" on two separate lines though. It makes it seem too- choppy. Other than that.. |
| Steel Winged Angel 2005-01-13 ch 1, | Seems like a list of thoughts, but it still holds the reader. Intresing style.~Hawke |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-01-12 ch 1, | fast-beat! depressing, yes. but at the end! anyway though, thank you for calling my poetry "sexy"- that delighted me. since I haven't been in a really serious relationship, I can;t give you any advice. I can only say you rock. |
| Nails For Your Crucifix 2005-01-11 ch 1, | The repitition actually worked for this piece, which suprised me greatly. It seemed more like a constant stream of conciousness, but I suppose that worked for this. Pretty good job. I look forward to reading more. |
| simpleplan13 2005-01-10 ch 1, | well i personally really like the format.. and the poem is very true.. tis cool.. |