Loved the poem, especially when you used Edgar Allan Poes Line “Everything we see and seem Is but a dream within a dream.” You should have gave him credit. Anyway, keep writing.

Jaded,Swimmergirl

Awesome! Another VERY unique poem! The writing couldn't be any better. I like how you break this poem up. Makes it more...edgy I say. Good job!

Of course. Not, but at the same time we can. Just ... depends on what we feel we can loose, yeah?

oh i like this a lot, great structure here, id have loved to see the format you intended as it must be amazing! cool rhymes, not too forced, and loads of interesting ideas, very good! x weasel within x

Puppets to people who laugh at every mistake they make us create...I liked it! Very creative and saddening. Awesome stuff!

a poem fitting to todays society. a few minor fluctuations from rhyme scheme, but nothing major. I especially like the line "carved from rotted trees"

I would like to see more imagery. The images are there, but not very vivid. You are saying what happens instead of showing. Then again that is very difficult to do in the short length.

all in all it's good work and something you could easily build on.