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| Lakshmi Dragonfhain 2008-05-09 ch 6,  | abuseThis is very well written. Your characters are compelling and interesting. I look forward to more! My major note is to edit (I'd be happy to Beta if you want one) and try not to use the a word more than once in a sentence. It gets redundant. There are lots of interesting synonyms out there. ~Dragonfhain |
| Chuu-chan 2008-03-28 ch 6, | abuseWhy was your last update in '05?! Write, damn you! You got me addicted to this story and then ditched it! Meanie! (runs off to cry hysterically) ... (back from crying) All right, fine... I'll beg: PLEASE WORK ON THIS STORY! I'LL LOVE YOU BUNCHES AND BUNCHES IF YOU DO! |
| Kalista Jia 2008-03-27 ch 5, | abusewow your descriptions for the story are so nice and well written! aww they are having a moment of peace! curse Slade! |
| Chasmodai Blue 2008-03-20 ch 6, | abuseEven if you haven't updated in three years, I thought I'd tell you you're amazing and that your story is great...especially the atmosphere of the world that Kalonice and Baran live in. Skillfully done now. I only wish this was longer. (I figure if you ever get this review, I'm going to put you on alert in the hopes that you'll get the hint and write more.) Okay, I'm done. |
| xXMissyxX 2008-01-09 ch 6, | abuseThis is cute! Too cute to have sad moments. Update soon! |
| SesshoumaruTakahashi 2007-11-24 ch 6, | abuseKEEP HIM! I will be sad if he gets rid of Kalonice... I loved your story and I am (Patiently) Waiting for more. ^^ |
| ChrisCHJ 2007-11-18 ch 6, | abuse*is crying* kalonice is so nice and I love baran, please write more |
| Chloe Caralee 2007-06-28 ch 6, | abuseI really hope you update soon, I really like this story so far ^.^ |
| K.C. Benadam 2006-11-12 ch 6, | abuseThis is an amazing story. Are you ever going to update. I hope you do. |
| StrugglingAngel 2006-08-06 ch 6, | abuseI'm really liking your story so far, although the lack of updates have kind of curbed my enthusiasm. If you are still writing on this story, I would like to find out a little more about Kalonice's past, like how he came to be a slave, ect.I do hope you'll continue writing! |
| Islandbreeze 2005-09-09 ch 3, | abuseAha! New developments...interesting, interesting...and the escape has been made! Kalonice's reaction to the "bait incident" was so realisitic, you've done a great job with character. Good ending to this chapter, adding loads of suspense. |
| Islandbreeze 2005-09-09 ch 2, | abuseAw, poor Kalonice... the dungeon sounds just awful as does the Duke...and I like the description of Baran...making him sound like a proud lion, it really fit. This is excellent so far. Your descriptions are lovely, and portray the character of each man through action-like how hurt Kalonice is, how scarred. |
| Islandbreeze 2005-09-09 ch 1, | abuseVery powerful and interest catching chapter...Kalonice is a very cool and unusual name and I love it...your writing is rich and detailed, and the serious tone is well used. Good job |
| Painted Desert 2005-03-01 ch 5, | abusecont.! more more more more more. yum |
| Esquirella 2005-03-01 ch 6, | abuseHe's supposed to ravish Kalonice, that's what! LOL! Great chapter and glad you're back. |