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| Clap Clap Raise Your Hands 2005-05-08 ch 1,  | abuseHERE'S A SIGN - KEEP WRITING FOOL! love the x weasel within x |
| Xechs Marquise 2005-02-28 ch 3, | abuseHey this is pretty good. Is it an actual account of you life or just a figment of your imagination? Either way it's pretty funny. Don't get me wrong I can sympathize with you, my parents have been divorced who so long now that I have no memeories of them together anymore. But I always got a kick out of seeing them fight. And hearing you talk about yours reminds me of mine. I've had three step mothers, two step fathers, five step brothers, four step sisters, and one half sister out the whole ordeal. My father's single now and my mother's in the best marriage so far, this one seems that it's going to last. This story is pretty good but I don't think I'll keep reading it. It all well and good that you can openly express your life like this, if it really is your real life. But I think I'll stick to Broken Memories for now. Unitl next time,Xechs Marquise |
| Elspeth Gwen 2005-02-15 ch 1, | abuseI really enjoyed your story. It exhibits your emotions in an honest way that lays everything out. This is a good piece of writing, except that "Lennie" is not identified. I just assumed he was your grandfather. I can relate to your family history. My family is more secretive, but it doesn't make it any less real. I feel for you. |
| Lance Cortex 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abuseI sympathize with you entirely. My parents seem to be going through a similar process, and it is a very difficult time for all of us. In any event, I would like to hear about what happens next. Please keep the updates coming. |
| Xenila Poe 2005-01-12 ch 1, | abuseI found your fifth paragraph rather divergent. I guess what I mean to say, is that it did not follow the style and fluency of your overall peice. For example, the "duh" and the "aww ain't that nice..." in my personal opinion these parts just seemed out of place for the general flow. Overall excellency however. I enjoy reading your work and can't wait till you update with more. |