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| Sketchkat the Lynx 2005-11-09 ch 1,  | abuselol :D youve certainly captured a satirical view...Love the fact that i imagined a fat guy giving a speech just not giving a damn-especially in "sorry,didnt mean to kill you there" :P Made my day :) Excellent |
| Xavier Everett 2005-04-03 ch 1, | abuseCompletely true in every respect. Congratulations. Xavier Everett |
| Luneko 2005-03-16 ch 1, | abuseOne word: Harsh. More words: I'll be perfectly honest, because I respect your talent. This poem gives me a vague, sick feeling in my chest. I think it's too blunt. What are you trying to do in this poem? Turn people to your side? Then cool it down a bit, introduce your ideas slowly and softly, then work your way to a climax once you have them hooked. Or were you just venting your seething hatred for differing views? If so, excellent job. But the style doesn't mesh with your usual works, maybe because those are filled with love. |
| Crazy In 88 2005-02-17 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is verry good. Makes a great point- but that's america- democratic murderers screaming "we just want peace." You hit it right on the freakin' head. If you liked "Yokai No Unmei" check out The Yokada since i don't know which to take down, but its gonna be one of 'em. Ttyl. keep posting more poems! |
| soc 2005-01-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseagreed baker, seriously girl, lighten up |
2005-01-18 ch 1, anon. | abusesarcasm is too blunt for you. stop trying to reach the masses and enjoy yourself.-Baker |
| Purple Honeydew 2005-01-15 ch 1, | abuseThe tone in this poem is what makes it truly great. Keep up the awesome work! |
| poetic abortion 2005-01-14 ch 1, | abuseA great message and so true. ^-^ Well done !! ^o^ ~* Noelle O.O;V *~ |
| simpleplan13 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abuseso true.. amazing poem with a great message |
| Plato's Socialist Democracy 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abusethat was great. would have been better it rhymed. |
| Anjeni Windsinger 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abuseWow... I love that mocking tone. And the ending! I wasn't expecting that, so it threw me off a bit, but man, that's a great way to end this poem. Great work. |