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| Gir Garcia 2005-01-25 ch 1,  | abusewow...yea, that is more a realistic storie then the others...but good otherwords. i've thought a teacher of mine was sexy...but never a crush. its good tho...its great...i love ur stories! |
| Siberia1 2005-01-23 ch 1, | abuseA sad and heartfelt piece. The narration was wonderful to read. Maybe I'm just a sucker for stories that are more realistic, but I much prefer this side of your writing over the longer works. I hope you'll compose more like it soon. Two thumbs up! b^_^d |
| deli 2005-01-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseyou have to update...you left me on the edge of the mountain.. great story! |
| Alex J. Finn 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abusew00t! the second half is exactly how i feel, except that it has been two years, not one :P - and the big words...i need to look those up :S yeah, i feel sad now when i read it, coz i remember you-know-who...i can't really picture her face but i can remember that time when she was laughing... *sigh* okay so enough reminiscing-ising thing, i like how you've decided to do a 'realistic' account :D and i'll stop with the emoticons now...please note that i could be trying to come across as intellectual and analytical but it's not really working. i just wanted to say that this really captures my feelings (possibly also every other female student falling for female teacher encounter) |
| Not really now not any more 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abuseThere's a lot of feeling behind this story, but you tend to be just a slight bit bookish and overly derivative in some parts. Try breaking down some of your earlier sentences and replacing a portion of the loaded language with words that aren't as 'good' but convey the soul of the text better. I guarantee that there are plenty. |
| Sarion 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abuseYeah I know what you're thinking, I reply way too much. :p I can't help it. I love your writing.This is a cute one, but I honestly have much love for your other two. I find them decently realistic, it -is- possible. Keep writing. |