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| cling peach 2005-06-12 ch 5,   | "I was too young and too pretty for duty!" LOL! Hilarious line. Anyway, all I have to say about the rest is WOW. GABRIEL! How... what... ugh! No! Oh, PLEASE write more of this- I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS! This is truly an awesome story. Amazing plot, perfectly written, and totally great. Keep writing! |
| cling peach 2005-06-12 ch 4, | LOL! Andy looked like a baby bear?! That is so CUTE! Geez, I just love that. But I don't really like Moreau. She was mean to Gabriel! Who is NOT a devil! (Is he? Oh, please, no!) I loved the kiss scene, by the way. Simply awesome. Great work! |
| cling peach 2005-06-12 ch 3, | WOW. Just... wow. That is SO cool! I loved the ending, by the way. I LOVE Gabriel- so CUTE! Lol, anyway, great work, I'm really liking this story! |
| cling peach 2005-06-12 ch 2, | Wow... creepy. But I like Gabriel. I seem to like all your male characters, lol. But Gabriel's innocence is really cute. Anyway, I would say more, but I have to keep reading. So far, this is super confusing but really interesting too so I really want to find out what's going on! Very good work. |
| cling peach 2005-06-12 ch 1, | *snicker* Sorry, but that poem made me think of mailmen. It was a really good poem, but that's the first thing that popped into my head and it cracked me up. Anyway, on with the story. I like Jamie. He sounds really sweet. I loved how he was so concerned when she fell. Really cool, that whole thing, by the way. Facinating. And so was the ending. Wow. Very cool. (Though, I'm kind of unsure why she'd get to go home when she just fell down the stairs- that certainly doesn't happen at my school and I should know! Not only do I pretty much fall down the stairs daily, I fall UP them, too! Yes, I'm a complete klutz.) Next chapter! |
| killer katie 2005-01-27 ch 5, | I knew it! I KNEW you'd do something to turn us against Gabriel... Ah well, c'est la vie. I still wish Gabriel was the nice boy again. =_= |
| Jiggaboo 2005-01-26 ch 5, | I told you not to make Gabriel the bad guy. But I guess it wouldn't be a story then would it? Does he kill her? DOes he not kill her? hurry and update please!! |
| Maibe Josie 2005-01-26 ch 5, | oh snap...i'm blaming it on Mr.Johnson |
| Jiggaboo 2005-01-25 ch 4, | I absoloutely loved this chapter. I love how it gives you the chance to make predictions about whay Moreau called Gabriel a devil and what's gunna happen next. Gabriel seems like such a aweetheart u can't make him out to be the bad guy. Can't wait to read more~Kissa |
| Maibe Josie 2005-01-24 ch 4, | hell if i had the guts, i prolly woulda kissed him too |
| Jiggaboo 2005-01-23 ch 3, | FINALLY!! now we know who she is and a lot more about her. I hope you update soon, I love Gabriel's character too! |
| Maibe Josie 2005-01-23 ch 3, | aww Gabriel sounds like a sweetie |
| Maibe Josie 2005-01-16 ch 2, | oh...intriguing still... |
| Jiggaboo 2005-01-16 ch 2, | I loved this chapter and I realli want to find out where she is, what's going on and why she is having these daydreams. Keep up the good work and please update soon! |
| Jiggaboo 2005-01-16 ch 1, | This first chapter was a really good start...WHy do you always stop at the good parts of the story? hehe i still loved it though. |