   Crescent Fairy 2007-06-02 . chapter 1Cute poem! It was really funny! It sounds almost like it's coming from the bridge to insanity. Don't take that as an insult though! I'm not saying you're insane, rather, I am implying you have a wide range of ideas to come from and a good variety of poems and perspectives. In shorter terms, I liked it! :) |
 Colastar 2005-06-14 . chapter 1Too funny! Had an unexpecting ending, too!! Fun poem! |
 Thithsillus 2005-06-04 . chapter 1:) I laughed again.You frighten one moment, amuse the next... Sheesh! I admire your dexterity. |
 thedarkthatiwas 2005-02-21 . chapter 1Lol! This is reall good, really funny! Somehow I just love it. It's on my favourite stories/poems list. Really good! |
 Le Rose Clair du Nuit 2005-02-14 . chapter 1XD Beskin, you're so funny. It was the peanut. X3!! -huggles jack skellington umbrella- it wasn't the sugar it was the poptarts (remind me to tell you about it sometime). I'm putting up another V-day poem let me know what you think when I get it up! -cackles- PITY PARTY!!
Ahem.
Mistress Joe |
 crapinacan 2005-02-12 . chapter 1hey i think i know you! i'm divya...from book club. yeah. anyway.HOLY MOLEY THIS MADE ME LAUGH SO MUCH! it's great! |
 Takehiro 2005-02-11 . chapter 1;_; hee hee! i laughed so hard i cried. AWESOME!! SO AWWESOME!! next time do one about a ferret and a racoon. ^_^ |
 Meli-dear 2005-02-10 . chapter 1I enjoyed this short little work! it was cute in some sort of way actually, very good!Usually I don't read any poetry, but the name won my attention |
 Arrow's Flight 2005-02-06 . chapter 1Watch out for author's on sugar highs, we write some of our best work.
Be afraid. Be very afraid. THe style is a little different, but I really like it. |
 The Great Charlatan 2005-02-04 . chapter 1You really like Angelfish...
This is a nice little silly poem. You need to work on the metre of this. For example.
" once saw an angelfish swimming through the sky,
And I truly wondered if that sugar had made me high."
The second is shorter than the first so the metre is off. In this format, I think that it is an important thing to maintain. Perhaps change it to.
"And I wondered if that sugar was what had made me high."
Just my thoughts,
The Charlatan. |
 Stories-have-souls 2005-02-04 . chapter 1LOL VeRy amusing, I can imagine a lil' mongoose paddling through the air... |
 Second-Hand-Screamo 2005-02-02 . chapter 1Lol. This is great. That's it, you're going on my faves list right now! |
 Chasing Whimsy 2005-01-21 . chapter 1Hah, I thought the first two lines were funny. Mongeese + something absurd = Cool. |
 Lanturn 2005-01-21 . chapter 1cute and funny! wonderful poem! |
 crazy-lady141 2005-01-21 . chapter 1Heh heh! I love mongooses. |
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