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| daphnegray78 2005-01-16 ch 1,  | abuseThis has a great rhythm to it. Not only that, but the rhyming was great...it was subtle enough that I barely even noticed it! And that's how you know it's good...I hate it when poems sound liek they're being forced to rhyme. Anyways, great work! ~Daphne~ |
| BeautifulEcho 2005-01-16 ch 1, | abusekool poem. it was really deep, which is probly why i didnt understand some of it...lol im slow. but theres only one line that i didnt like "Know the pain and sorrow and regrets". instead of using "and" after pain, use a comma. it sounds better and the line isnt as long or as out of place. good message from the poem though and overall great job! keep it up, Dreamer! ~BeautifulEcho~ |