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| slayer of evil 17 2005-01-16 ch 1,   | i really like this Lynn, it so full of energy and has a powerful message. your stuff is fantastic and i can't wait to read more. |
| LordK 2005-01-15 ch 1, | Deep. I liked this, especially the end. You might take heat from the line about already being gone, and remember (coming from a fellow brother in Christ here), nobody is gone until thier time on this Earth is up. They always have a choice. That being said, this has a really really good message. The rhyme scheme was very tight and well done. I think the poem itself might've been a little more interesting with some metaphorical terms or something, but really, really cool message. This could be a great rap about God. |