... Wow. Last line really wraps it up well. You are very good at conveying the vibe, but if I may offer a suggestion, I think that in the beginning you went a little adjective-happy. Don't get me wrong, description is great and you're great at it, but you may overdo it a bit on the big words. A little goes a long way. I'm sure your English teacher died and went to heaven when she/he read this, but for the rest of us mortals who read for pleasure, so many three+ syllable words strung together can get a bit overwhelming.

Just a thought. Other than that, I'm very impressed. I like the whole dark vibe you have going on. Cery creepy-cool.

~The Willow~