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Derdekea 2005-05-11 ch 21,	abuseWow...it's like, over. Great job... anyways, to point out the things I didn't really like...something i probably don't have any right to do, but will do anyways. Okay, well, i didn't like that there wasn't any real consquence to what they had done to ril and his father. It was just sort of, "oh well too bad so sad". i dunno, maybe there should be a lesson there or something? umm...i've decided i don't really like the contrast between the PM and the president...I don't think it's entirely fair.I sill think the human invasion to have been a little weak. I thought that Stella's exit was a little abrupt. i was hoping for that to become a romance or something. and the cavalier way they treated her death is kind of upsetting too. in the end 4 eudens, and a dozen soldiers died to get niko back? finally, i think the supposed superiority of the eudens is not very believable. It was a little far-fetched. I mean, they needed government, and the king did murder someone. Drago, i think, was obsessed with revenge for awhile. They weren't very angelic...oh yeah, and one inexperienced euden killing a whole bunch of soldiers, no matter how surprised, seems seems a little unlikely too. Oh and finally, i really don't like the whole frank chamber killing is wife thing. Couldn't they die together or something? =( But yeah...your way works too...just doesn't make the reader happy... anyways, great story. absolutely fantastic!
Belle Fille x 2005-05-01 ch 1,	abusex from PMB! ~~So far so good. :D Loving it, really am. n__nI'll try to read more in spare time.
firefly7071 2005-04-28 ch 19,	abuseIt's really good, especially the beginning of the story. Somehow I can't manage to do those... ^^ (I added you to my Favorites list. XD)
Derdekea 2005-04-28 ch 19,	abuseGood...but i'm not sure i understood everything. I thought Frank Chambers told Alex about the whole alien thing. Wasn't that why he freaked out and left...otherwise i'm confused. I mean it would have to be something completely traumatizing to make Alex give up like he did. Um...yeah. So update soon. The climaz is nearing!
phallus 2005-04-19 ch 18, anon.	abuse^_^; I love how the prime minister is human and therefore stronger but still cr**ing himself. XD the presidents character is good but a bit predictable. well written though. ^_^
Derdekea 2005-04-18 ch 18,	abuseWell, I think some of the separations were a little choppy...i think the king part could be delayed...? Anyways, i simply loved the president...tres politician. I have to say I really dislike the whole Mr. Chambers having killed him wife...at least, i think that's what was implied. I was liking him despite his faults. ...in the beginning didn't it mention that humans were a great deal stronger than euden? couldn't the pm have fought back? Good chapter anyways.
Shinigamizm 2005-04-10 ch 17,	abuseThanks again for the great review. ^_^ Yep, there are certain things that are going to be changed as I go back to edit the story - the swords are being edited out as you're quite right, there's no sense in them having them. Something I plan to go back and add to one of the chapters is that they have a King to keep the three islands united, and to act as a positive figure to look to - as it can get quite drab there, with all the dust and greyness. Also, yes, it does seem silly that they're still going to continue searching on Earth even they could indeed all die or not get back in time, but that's the risk they're prepared to take. I'm going to go back to earlier chapters to put more emotion and determination into the parts where they are planning and talking to Stella. And, hehe, as far as I know Claudia isn't really the Queen's granddaughter - I'm trying not to make it too specific to retain a fantasy sort of feel about it, even the parts on Earth. Thanks again! Looks like I've got quite a bit of work still left to do, heh. ^_^
Derdekea 2005-04-08 ch 17,	abusegood chapter. nice descriptions with the magotty stuff...yuckiness. Okay, just logistically, i'm getting a little doubtful. I mean, one brother was sacrificed in order to bring another brother home that they already knew was alive, and more brothers may yet still die? they care and all, but if they all die, or just don't return, then who is going to rule their world? another point: if eudaemonia is such a perfect world where no protection is needed for the family royalty, like at buckingham palace, why is a ruler even necessary? couldn't they just live in perfect harmony? I know you metioned that they all allied themselves to the one king, but why they would need to in the first place? it doesn't make any sense if they have no one to fear and need no protection. Furthermore, there was mention of swords in the beginning too...if there's no wars, why is there a need for weapons? oh! i absolutely adore the word yob! it is simply wonderful! =) does the queen really have a granddaughter claudia? i noticed you havn't mentioned what queen...the girl's dialogue was quite cute. "the pry minister": nice touch. Okay, yes good chapter...plot develpment! brutal cliffhanger at the end too.
Derdekea 2005-04-02 ch 16,	abuseOkay...the ending is so incredibly disgusting! I suppose that means that Anno is indeed dead... I really liked that you pointed out the writing similarities; many stories don't bring notice to that type of thing. I wonder if it's foreshadowing...but even if it's not, the miracle explanation is acceptable too. the story is progressing wonderfully!
Derdekea 2005-03-27 ch 15,	abuseInteresting chapter. Different than the others. I don't know where you're planning to go with it...it makes me want to go on a nature walk. Happy writing.
GotinksX 2005-03-26 ch 14,	abuseAlso a good chapter from a nice author.
Derdekea 2005-03-23 ch 14,	abuseOh! This is really getting good! Humanity seems to be quite contagious... I thought the dialogue really flowed well to show the prince's feelings towards their situation in this chapter. Quick updates again! yay! Write more soon!
Derdekea 2005-03-20 ch 13,	abuseLoved it. Nice cliffhanger too. update soon.
GotinksX 2005-03-20 ch 13,	abuseNice story great length. Check out soe of my works. your a nice writer. Don't let no one tell you wrong.
Derdekea 2005-03-10 ch 12,	abuseYeah, that is what I'm basing my comments on. I understand that what he was saying was simple lies and propoganda, but i don't understand why he said them in the first place if they were always unsure about any profits. I mean, you've given him personalities and not all of them seem to be completely bad, from my point of view at least. He doesn't seem like the type of guy who would go and kill pointlessly, using resources for no reason. If it was going to be top secret then there was not any reason to do it to gain the people's votes. Er...if that made any sense...It's been awhile since I read it. Okay, this chapter. Well, the emotions were very well portrayed, but yeah, it felt a bit like a filler. I really hope the story picks up soon.

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