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| Cashaholic 2008-05-28 ch 1,  | abuse'She Slit Through Like Tears And Beauty Died.' Humm... is it supposed to be read like that, or is it just me? x. Cashaholic |
| Aros Wynn 2007-04-11 ch 1, | abuseWow...that was very realistic. and very sad. |
| Named Gene 2006-04-03 ch 1, | abuseI'm not a fan of slitwristsuicide poems because they sometimes feel overly dramatic, but there are nice parts to this, especially this: "and they only knew the day she Diedof self-inflicted liberty" The capitalizations are interesting, though I don't know the meaning behind them. Not bad. :) - Tammy |
| Hazeleyed Everglades 2006-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI like it, especially the alien feeling the format gives, distancing itself from the reader, just like the girl is distanced from everyone around her. It's like no matter how much you can relate, you can't completely understand-- just like it is in real life. Very nicely done. |
| Vivian Rose Pierce 2006-02-18 ch 1, | abuseWow. The capitalization in the middle of the lines added a slight punch to my minds ear. I like it. |
| caricature of intimacy 2005-12-24 ch 1, | abuseThis is really interesting...I love the imagery, for one thing. She called to say she killed herself...it's almost irony. I read the whole thing once and thought...wow...strong imagery. I read it a second time and really thought about what that means. She called to say she killed herself. At first I thought of a telephone call, and then I thought of calling for help, as some say suicide is. Similarly, the rest of the poem did the same. I love the capitalized letters. It adds a certain symmetry, an emphasis. And of coruse the last line, which is tremendous. Self inflicted liberty. I seriously had shivers when I finished. This is amazing. Great job. |
| HauntedMisery 2005-11-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful, excellent job! |
| jack 2005-10-10 ch 1, anon. | abusemorbid. i like it. |
| Kigono 2005-08-24 ch 1, | abuseI'm not making a comment about this because I know some people who read reviews, and I'm not setting myself up, but good poem, I can feel the blood and stuff... |
| strawberryaid 2005-07-21 ch 1, | abuseShort and bittersweet. I like it. HA! I KNEW you were a poet! Can't escape another poet's senses I tell ya! I really like 'self-inflicted liberty' it almost holds an ironic substance to it. |
| Forget-The-Sorrow 2005-04-17 ch 1, | abuseDark, but Good. |
| Infinite Abyss 2005-03-29 ch 1, | abuseThat was pretty good. |
| DaDel Amor 2005-03-24 ch 1, | abuseEh, kind of dark. Not as dark as I would have thought, but maybe Dank? I don't know, I like it though. It conveyed a message, a message that all of us should be aware of. |
| concordance 2005-01-19 ch 1, | abuseyou're back! wh00t! very grim. well written though. moods always influence some aspect/the entirety of what we write. ciao! ~Veronica |
| amphiboly 2005-01-19 ch 1, | abuseits good. update the STRENGTH OF ETERNITY! it so rocks. |