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| becaboo14 2005-07-16 ch 9,  | AWA- CUTE |
| Darken Tearz 2005-01-21 ch 9,  | aw! how awesome...they r gonna really have a good life together...fox better not mess it up this time! |
| what-climbed-up-ur-arse 2005-01-21 ch 9, | the story is good.. can't wait to hear of the sequel .. update soon.. ciao |
| wolf-of-the-dark-night 2005-01-20 ch 9, | WAHOO! LOL THAT was good! |
| what-climbed-up-ur-arse 2005-01-20 ch 8, | the story is really great.. update soon.. can't wait! ciao |
| Darken Tearz 2005-01-20 ch 8, | hey girl...wow that was great...i would have killed that ** for messin with my man! but anyways keep it goin im really likin this story 2! ^.~ love ya! later |
| Adders721 2005-01-20 ch 8, | Wow..I don't like aubrey! Can't wait for more! Loved the chapter!~adeders~ |
| wolf-of-the-dark-night 2005-01-20 ch 7, | Fox needs to get his priorities straight! LOL LOVE the story!! Keep it up! |
| Adders721 2005-01-20 ch 7, | Aww...stupid fox! He better have a good reson! Can't wait for more!~adders~ |
| Adders721 2005-01-19 ch 6, | I glad he felt bad about hurting her he deserved it! Can't wait for more!~adders~ |
| Adders721 2005-01-19 ch 5, | Wow..I'm sorry but Fox can be a major **! Can't wait for more! Sorry i have beens o busy i will try to review more!~adders~ |
| wolf-of-the-dark-night 2005-01-19 ch 5, | Hey!! I like this story so far but this chapter kinda confuzaled me! I just don't understand what went on. They took a nap then all of a sudden he slammed her against the railing and punched her? ... If you can please explain this to me.. Knowing me though I am probably just missing something... CONTINUE!! |
| SweetPea19 2005-01-19 ch 1, | Very interesting story. Looking Forward to reading the rest! |
| Kessiwaa 2005-01-19 ch 4, | This is a great story but this is based on a show ("Passions") so I think you should post it on fanfiction.net Don't get me wrong it's a great story but if you want more reviews it would be smart to post it there instead. Just a suggestion! And one other thing I'm wondering if the italics are memories because if they are not either memories or hidden meanings I think you should leave it normal print. Also, you could of used more detail. It seemed to be lacking some emotion or expression. For example: "I'm sorry I hate being around Rebecca" She said with a sigh. Instead: "I'm sorry I hate being aroound Rebecca" Theresa sighed the irratation that absorbed it's self around her name quite obvious. Is that a little better? Besides you won't have to worry if your story is too short if you have enough emotion. Other than that it's great! |
| what-climbed-up-ur-arse 2005-01-19 ch 3, | the story is really good.. plz update soon ciao |