Wow, nice job. Very visual. Keep writing!

~Mlle. Daae

uh... interesting tale... wutever... pretty good.

that was sad, i mean just a little too nasty and shallow.

wow. very... shall i say hott? so i take it you two had a webcam? or something? anyways good poem. (it's the type that would make my friend's girlfriend horny!)

That was disgusting. Why do you molest fictionpress-readers with your sexual taste? I do not object to poems about sex, but this isn't poetic at all. Just gross. If I were your girlfriend, I would slap you in the face for this.

this is a really good poem!! i can really feel the emotion!!the thought you put into making it was worth it! i hope you can write more...~~kath