Wow... this is kind of chilling... I can relate to the last few lines definitely... Very well written and expressed... well done!I'm adding this to my favourites...

Nonsense, it's not just great, but quite descrptive as well. Strong emotions you've displayed!

i like it.. the descriptions are amazing... I like it a lot ::adds to favs::

I really like this. It seems almost Charles Bukowski-ish, just because of the story-poem thing. The language and line-breaks are marvelous. Good vocabulary.Thanks for the review, too.

I really liked the story of the poem, though I'm not too sure I liked the form. Perhaps thats just my preference for rhyme and meter speaking? I thought the story was very absorbing, though I really need to reread the ending there. I don't think I quite understood the implications... Anyway, generally good poem.