i like it. its different and it could mean alot of things to alot of people... very good...

Good thinking, I like the idea.

.It. It's an amazing concept. I love the lack of capitals, the shortness, and the separation of the last line. It's brilliant. Absolutely brilliant.

okay, i have two more things to say. one, i noticed your name has to do with poetry so i'm sorry about that part. second, if i wrote these on fanfic, then i'd get booted off for having myself in a story. so that's why i wrote it on here. cu l8r!

Wow, what a powerful poem this is! Death is really that sudden! It happens like that, and you can't stop it! Once your soul's gone, BAM! YOU'RE gone! Either to Heaven or Hell... AH! I'm scaring myself! lol VERY good poem!

O the pendulum! I like how you can say so much with so little words. You should be proud!

i think death when i read this. nicely done.

interesting piece, I'll be thinking on this awhile.

Aw...thats sad... -sniff sniff- I LUV the title you choose. It alwas seems to different than expected. Most poets write about how they bled, and this leads to death. I love the idea about the Pendulum. You should give me some tips on how to become a gr8 poet, like u, I really need them..

I like how you mention death without actually using the word. Good work.

I like this poem - it reflects death well.

You have written a bloody large amount.

Great metaphor. Amazing!

nice. short. I like it, it's somewhat eerie, and that works well along with the topic.

amazing metaphor.. short but awesome

nice poem. concise and simply stated. nice use of metaphor as well. good job. _