this is awesome your a really good writer.

intersting... i don't know what to say to that one, so laters and way to go!

damn, i think you're weird. way to go, salmon!

ooh, creepy. yeah, auto accidents screw up lots of things. expecailly people's lives. laters and good job!

wow, thats scary! i assume you're talking about wicca? no offense, but if you're after power, thats a really weak way to get it. oh well, good job!

wow, thats aweseome! very incredibly depressing and crazy. i hope its not true, as most poetry is, in some way. okies, well, talk to you later and bye!

Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

nicely done. I like the lines "Taste the salty sea as it/Rests on my lips"I think it's needing some punctuation.

It really gives a sense of self-worth. Also, I feel an urge to say 'load of crock', because of differing opinion, mostly as a response to the last line.

it started seeming very cliched, but you really did express the story well. nice ending.

That was beautiful and heartbreaking. You are a wonderful poet. I hope that you submit another poem soon.

Wow this is really amazing- if you really went through all that- all I have to say is-wow

Wow, powerful testimony i hope this didn't happend to you though.Keep up the good work though.

Very well written poem. I wonder what you meant by based on tragic experience. When are you going to update? You're a good poet.

I love it. I captures your emotions quite well, and the reader can feel them. Wonderful job.

Welcome! I think your style will evolve through this experience at fictionpress, but for a start you don't do bad at all ... keep on posting and keep writing, it always helps ...

keltica, the celtic fire from within