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| LordK 2005-01-22 ch 1,  | abuseWow... that was very, very pretty. The chorus was really good, "Ashes to ashes..." was excellent. If I had one problem with it (aside from the formatting, but that's personal preference anyway) it was that the stanzas were a little uneven feeling. But the images were beautiful, and I could definitely feel the doubt and the confusion. Also the bridge-ish section where "like an angel" was repeted communicated so many emotions. That was very nice. Cool. |