Wow.

What a really original idea for a story.

It's really, really, good. Keep it up.

that was great. i loved it alot. very descriptive. you have a good use of words and it was very emotional. keep up the good work.

that was amazing; you're very talented... but you must have everyone who has read this say that to you. it's very descriptive; beautiful.well done

that was utterly amazing!! truly.. ur descriptions r mind blowing.. just how describe the girls politeness... and how the hairdresser feels d need to help her... and how the girls spits d sweet out moments after it touches mouth.. u have an amazing talent.. for feeling and emotion and description... i feel every word u say.. and picture it al with ease not with starin as is often the case!! i had a mild dose of anorexia and i still dont eat for days sumtimes... WELL DONE on tackling this issue! keep up d amazin work! love and admiration Gretchen45 x please r and r my story 'Truly madly deeply' as itd mean alot to me, its dark and the girl is dealin wit loss and anorexia.. its my fave piece of my writin. tanx x

this is pretty good. its moving, and it prtrays a point. coz your new to this, you should try to write most types of storys, dont just stick to this kind. you get more reviews that way and it helps you find what you want to write.

anyway, this has got to be one of the best storys ive read. pls pls plsa keep writing