Great use of descriptive words in this poem. I like the first part the most. Great job. Please read and review my stuff.

So sweet and beautiful. I adore it. It has just a whimsical feel!

Lovely alliteration.

omg i had a huge thing to tell you... and i hit shift esc which deleted EVERYTHING AH basically it siad..1 nice poem2 im never gunna ever read all 2202.5 i bet they all rock tho3 ill comment ur 6th entry4 i think you;ll like my lesbian lament5 something about ... i dont knoe..6 ... i was asking what sardonic meant5 after asking what sardonic meant ... i said that it might be what 4 is all about...6.. no.. 7 AH *confused* ... yea... ok... well imma go.. .cause i just messed with my head.. keep it up and ... 3 ...~Quazzarr

this was very beautiful. I loved it so much. you are a great poet.

Nice poem. I enjoyed its flow. I heard you were a good writer and you are.

Wishing You Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, ~SirScott~

Wow, Namir! The movement in this poem just blew me away. I love it.

It's always refreshing to find good writers here. Uh-huh, I think you're very talented.

Wow. i love this! u'r writing style is truly unique. so much so that i had to go chek out your bio page he he. i do believ i'm met my match in musical/reading tastes. Definitely one of the most talented writers/poets on fictionpress.

Wow what a strange and absorbing bio. And you use language so flawlessly, it's addictive. (I'll be reading more when I get the time) peace

beautiful as always

Wow, very good! ^.^

short and to the point, muchly nicely little piece here, good flow, well done

lovely..."mold me into something new; something beautiful; for you"...truly amazing...

congrats on ur grill purchase! again, thanx so much for the review - its was very nice of you and made me feel special...

i'd love to see more poetry coming out of you, write about anything - about how the sky is green for all i care! your talent is inspiring for all of us...

=D luvya!

~Tabitha the Great

Beautiful. Just so you know, I'm bisexual, too.

Really beautiful, I lvoed it.