That's really good, but this one lacked a little something that the other one have, probably your emotion in it. I'm not so sure...

but the meaning in it was great! it's really clear! I heard about the tsunami victims...our school just donated money though, but I have a feeling money isn't really what they were looking for from other countries...

well, keep it up!

-E.Tayne

P.S Beginners or not, some people are just born with it, i guess, lol. how does it feel like to be in an all boys school? (My cousin goes to an all girls school and said it was really boring)

a few things bout this poem..i think it's quiet simple coz u didn't really use bombastic words..however the message is clear and i personally like the ending..very profound!

"to be the well thought-outor the rejection"

haha..cool. peace out.

Wow...that's all i can say...just...WOW. You really have a way w/ words ya noe? no words can describe what yu just described, that was really good!! just...WOW...

WoW...3 letters...wow...dat wuz really gud hafez...but im suprised that no1 reviewd for dis...newayz..im ur first reviewer...and i give u a round of applause because dat wuz really gud...the words...and the emotions really came out towards me with sum affection...and im tellin u dat u hv a gift...and dat u shud neva lose it...so yea..newayz...peace, hurricane