I just don't know what to say anymore. I am...flabbergasted. Beyond flabbergasted. In awe. I bow down to your amazing abilities to make me want to sob!:>

I like the wave effect of the poem and the sylables... I totally spelled that wrong... *sigh* ok... where to begin, it was sad and I liked the fact that I could seen the scene in my mind... Another step closer...~NatalieBy the way... I'm still yelling at the stupid people that didn't review!

this is really sad, but its really good, and well written.

Solo

Good call on that one! Oh, sweet irony! This piece is genius, I love it! It reminds me of some pieces I've written. Feel free to check them out.

I has a nice sound to it. I really like how you've broken up the poem - formatted it I mean so its all sort of jerky to read - kinda like waves crashing on the rocks or something :D.

Thanks so much for taking the time to r/r my work! I really appreciate it - esp. when someone reads one of my stories lol.

-Write on!

You're really bery good. You deserve more reviews.

~Namir Swiftpaw

Nah... if you can still write poetry like this about sensations like this, have no fear of becoming the Old Maid in my Lament. At least you still feel, and you truly live right up to the moment Death takes you. Your style is interesting... terse and perhaps vague, but it certainly got emotion and sensation across. I didn't count syllables... did you go for a syllable effect? Good job... thanks for you review. :)