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| XxintoXpiecesxX 2005-01-24 ch 1, | abuseSuch a morbid outlook on life, I love it. You said something about them being young but you didn't really mention how young, i'm guessing either high school of junior high. Anyway good start to your story. I hope your bad dreams go away soon. |
| Juni 2005-01-24 ch 1, | abuseVery creepy. I hope that you continue this, its really very good so far. |
| o0oAnnie 2005-01-24 ch 1, | abuseThis is GREAT writing! I was a tiny bit confused in the begining but then I understood everything that was going on after a paragraph or so...you used new and original similies that really made it clear what things were like such as the "bone scraping glass" analogy...and the "icy fingers gripping his spin" they really made me hear the sounds and feel what the main character was feeling! Wonderful! Keep writing!:) |