Really good story. I liked all the characters a lot. I can't wait to read more of your stories.

Great story, keep up the good work.

So I ended up reading your other completed story too, haha. This story is cute. Marlo & Tobias work really well together :) I think if you're aiming for editing, I would maybe focus on the whole part with Carly. That was probably the weakest point of the story, but I'm not really sure what about it made it that way. I'm really happy that they got their happy ending, and usually when a guy is about to propose, it's pretty obvious, but I liked this, because even though you could guess that he was going to do that in the end, the reader was more just anticipating him asking her for forgiveness instead, so it was more of a surprise (at least for me), but it fit anyways. Oh. Another part that was a little eh was the whole karaoke bar part. I kind of feel like it should be cut out or something, just because the whole voting thing and competing against one another doesn't really make much sense, especially since Tobias has been singing all this time and Marlo was singing not at all, and the whole point of Marlo being in the band was that they were better together than just Tobias singing alone. The throwing lyrics into the middle of the chapter kind of got boring after a while too, but in the last chapter it worked really nicely.

Other than that, I like this story a lot. Marlo & Tobias are soo cute. :) Thank you for sharing this with us. I hope you keep on writing!

-- Alyssa

A huge smile is on my face! I loved that.

This was adorable and the song in the end made me smile like a fool. Amazing job :)

It's interesting, but it didn't really capture my attention all that much. The plot seemed pretty good so I can't wait to read it :)

Love the song

tighter than a pimp’s grip on his ho

LOL

If pleasure pointe were a real band, I'd totally listen. Are you sure you're not a famous member of some famous band this story isn't an anonymous autobiography?

NOT SURE IF YOU LIKED THE CHAPTER?! IT WAS THE BEST SO FAR! the caps are for emphasis. :)

You don't have nearly as many reviews as you deserve!

This story reminds me of me and my "guy" i guess, and we're always dodging each other somehow, me because i want to do it right and him because well who knows what he's thinking not even him i bet.

i think that's what's so great about this fic, and any romance fic, that its so realistic.

thanks for improving the quality of my summer vacation, lol.

Aw, that is literaly the only thing comign out of my mouth right now. Well, that and cute. I'm so happy he proposed is was unexspected to say the least.

This way a great story from start to finish, and congrats on all the hits you got on it.

-~Crimson Ara

I HEART THIS ENDING!

Its pretty late, so this review is going to be short: the story was sort of predictable, but you made it original. There was a lot less breaking up/making up between Lola and Tobias than what was to be expected and for that I thank you. There was a lot less angst to their story and a lot more self-discovery and emotion.

Good job!

Kon

Ok...this fic was amazing. I got chills and more chills and I think I may have even cried at some point.