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| HellHeartedlyBent 2005-09-29 ch 1,  | abuseholds to truth like breath clamps to lungs. good job. |
| pneumothorax 2005-06-19 ch 1, | abuseOdd and unusual. Not my favourite, but still good. (mm, constructive review. love 'em) |
| Unholy Haven 2005-06-03 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting poem! I think you write very well. |
| Kat-Renee Kittel 2005-05-07 ch 1, | abuseYour writing is very vivid and descriptive, and effectively influences the reader's thoughts. However you should change the rating for this poem and the 5,0 to at least K+, because of the depth of what is being said would be lost on someone younger (and the use of h* in 5,0).All the best and keep writing. -Kat |
| Stassney 2005-04-18 ch 1, | abusethis is great as well! |
| The Course 2005-03-13 ch 1, | abuseha ha that's funny. i like the last line. |
| LVYThN 2005-02-14 ch 1, | abuseHaha... It makes me smile (need I say more?) I like it ~LVYThN |
| Last Straw 2005-02-03 ch 1, | abusei love the last line! |
| Shadow.Lieutenant 2005-01-25 ch 1, | abuseNice stuff! I love that last line ... "and cuss at your mother in a language no one knows." I've always though babies curse when they're born ... |
| Chandra-Moon 2005-01-25 ch 1, | abuselol...for the most part, a very serious poem, but for some reason the last line made me laugh. like it...keep writing |
| WarriorHeart 2005-01-25 ch 1, | abusekinda funny in a warped sense... at least my warped sense. ; ) |