I like the plot, I just wish we knew what the girl's name was.But I got a question, why do you italicize "the girl" everytime?

This is a good start. There are a few mistakes, but i still like it. I noticed half-way through though that you changed ino's name to Ido. Also, i got a bit confused because the main character was just described as 'the girl', when ither people were also. However, i would like to see you continue with this, although maybe next time you could make it a little shorter? Thanks, Holly