Reviews for Scarecrow Kakashi

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still2twisted 2005-10-03 ch 9,	Long time, no review! Gomen! I've just been incredibly lazy and rather unproductive for a good long while now, Ake-chan. But that ends tonight...I hope! At long last, I have returned to review 'Scarecrow Kakashi'! So lets begin, shall we? You have a definitive voice for every one of your characters. When you write them out, the dialogue really drives home the fact that they are living, breathing people in a vast and lush world born from your imagination. It takes a real talent to create something so beautiful and near flawless. Talent that I have admitted you possessed more than a few times. I really find myself enjoying the growing connection between Nanashi and Yumi as well as the wonderful revelations in regards to his past. Man, once royalty until a demon cast a spell on him which turned Nanashi into a scarerow! Ouch! But anyway, back to the review. Spelling and grammar? They remain at a pretty good level of quality, though I will ask that you go over this chapter again as I did spot a few errors (example: missing period in the very first sentence.). But it was nothing that stunted the flow of your story or really drastically detract from the reading experience. I am still at an odd wondering as to why you don't get that many reviews. I know they say that it should be quality over quantity, but sometimes good feedback makes you feel like your doing a really good job. Ego stroking isn't THAT bad...if you don't let it go to your head, that is! LOL! Hm...favorite/least favorite characters? Well, my two faves are, of course, Nanashi and Yumi. Those two are just great together! I can't really say that I have a least fave yet. Maybe I'll get one after more reading of this excellent story! All in all, this chapter only further shpwcases your awesome talent in writing. I beg of you not to stop! It would truly be a loss to us all if you ever did... See you next review! Terryll Preston, still2twisted of FictionPress fame...
still2twisted 2005-04-13 ch 8,	Goodness! Way too long since I've been here! Jeez, Ake...you've finished this story and have added a sequel that I'll never get to at this rate! LOL! But dammit, I'm gonna try! Anyways, on to the review! I will say this right now. 'Scarecrow Kakashi' remains your absolute BEST work to date! You have such a great handle on your characters, one would have to think that you've been working on them for years and years. In this story, you have managed to combine great characterization, beautiful dialogue and a wonderful eye for describing a scene into one awesome fiction that you should be proud of and everyone on this site should read at least once. Hell, most people your age on FP could only wish for the ability to write this good. You have the talent Ake-chan, there's no doubt about that. I also love how you opened this chapter up with such well placed and perfectly legitimate sadness and sorrow from Yumi over Nanashi's choice to leave with Haru. In fact, those first few paragraphs do a great job at setting the tone and mood for this chapter. Excellent work! The interaction between all of your characters was absolutely incredible. And the way you ended it, with the possibility of Nanashi being some sort of royalty was a perfect hook to keep reading. All in all, this chapter just keeps on raising all of my expectations for your writing. You are, without a doubt, one of the best writers on this site. Never forget that. And never think that I've forgotten about your writing because I will always be there to review you. That's a promise! Well, that's it from me! Keep up the good work and happy writing! Terryll's Writing Tip: 'Remember that some readers don't want to be overkilled with description. While the majority don't mind, some people would rather use their imaginations as opposed to having every blade of grass or every little detail described to them. Overdescription can really strip the focus off of your characters and bog the story down in meaningless information. Be sure to find a perfect balance...' See you next review! Terryll Preston, still2twisted of FictionPress fame...
xo-lilacsxandxlolita-ox 2005-04-08 ch 1,	This was a brilliant story, and I especially liked the introduction, which was reminiscent of a great storyteller. Very well-written, and the characters seem to be realistic and three-dimensional, and the dialogue helps convince us about the characters' realism. The concept of a scarecrow seems extremely cute, and it's almost hard to believe that this is going to be an angsty story. But the more angst there is, the better ^_^ The prose is flowing and lyrical, and everything about it seems nothing short of perfection. Definitely a praise-worthy masterwork of fiction. chibichocobo
still2twisted 2005-03-22 ch 7,	Oh jeez, I'm sorry about not reviewing you any earlier than this! I've been busy and rarely had the time to log on to comment on anything. But, I'm here now! And that's what counts. Wow! Your talent just increases with every word that you write, Ake! You continue your excellent blend of great characterization and emotional interplay to tell a truly stunning story that just oozes originality. Your dialogue remains beautifully penned as ever and I don't see too many (if any) grammatical or spelling mistakes. The plot continues to be as engaging as it was when I first started to read this story. In a word, you continue to impress me. Keep up the good work. It might take some time, but I will review each and every chapter. I owe you that much for not keeping up with your story in the first place! LOL! See you next review! Terryll Preston, stilltwisted of FictionPress fame...
Peace Writer 2005-03-21 ch 1,	Wow, I must say, I just think of Mary Shelley's 'Frankenstein' when I read the first chapter. (only, the monster could actually eat, and yada yada)I like your writing style: it's a little bit looser than others as you allow your characters to make human mistakes. The depth, I felt, lackened slightly in the middle of the chapter during the dinner scene, but it's not unforgivable. In fact, it's hardly noticeable.I liked the characters and their personalities, but I think a touch more details for them wouldn't hurt.All inall, this is definitely a good read. I'll come back to read the rest later, but right now, I have english homework. (which is probably the most ironic thing in the world: they teach you how to read more than how to write)Keep writing!Peace out!
KonekOniko 2005-03-16 ch 12,	heh, good job! personally, i think this work is stronger then danzavier (sp? don't kill me if i spell it wrong! i even spelled my name wrong a few times!). oh well, very beautiful story, i hope to see more of your talent in other works (ps: how come my reviews for dnd didn't send? 0.0) great job, akemi-chan! hugs and gives you a cookie kudos ^-^ ~Sumi-chan; what you call love, i call pain.
KonekOniko 2005-03-16 ch 7,	takes a break from reading very, very good so far. =) it was an enjoyable read, very realistic, and...oh, i don't know! heh, i must say though, this is an impressive piece, it flows so easily that I lost track of time reading this. really great job ^-^ ~Sumi-chan; what you call love, I call pain.
Kakyou Takashiro 2005-03-16 ch 12,	nothing less than expected... although i argee about the ending. well, i'm not sure what to say, maybe just... thank you for an enjoyable read? no, that's too modest. ^^ you can understand... i suppose there's a loss of words, and a sense of satisfaction. i must say though. i'm thoroughly impressed with the fluid prose and the riviting story. kakyou
Ravenstone UK 2005-03-11 ch 10,	What can I say except...wow! So sad, yet so powerful and so courageous. It was like magic emerged from the keys to the story. Please, please keep up your obvious talent.
Chosen Aros 2005-03-11 ch 1,	Oh Angst! I love angst except important characters deaths..now that was sad and mean...anyhow..Your story is awesome! Will be one of my favorites! I love Wizard of OZ when I was kid and tried to read all possibe books related to OZ. Two favorite characters of mine would be Scarecrow and Jack PumpkinHead?...AHH I FORGOT JACK'S NAME! NO!! Anyhow, your story rocks and I like the idea that Nanashi was learning about human emotions. I really want to see how this turn out. Ciao!
linda 2005-03-03 ch 1,	this is really good Chibi-Akemi. Keep up the good work! You have made the reader care about your character. I am anxious to hear more about Nanashi's adventures.
Chibi-Akemi 2005-03-02 ch 7,	All right all right let's just clear it up right now! The italicized verses at the begining of each chapter is part of a song I wrote about "Scarecrow Kakashi" Think of it as one of hose image songs or something...>
still2twisted 2005-02-25 ch 6,	I'm glad to see that you have taken my advice about using the italics! It has made this a much better read! Uh, that's not to say that it wasn't good before...it just flows so much better now. Okay, I think that I may have dug myself into a hole that I won't be able to crawl out of. LOL! Anyways! As usual, Ake, you have done nothing but good work here and I seriously applaud the professionalism that I see here. The flow is wonderful, the wordplay is great and the characters and story remain extremely interesting. But, I did notice a few mistakes in your grammar and word usage. Here are some examples: "It was as if humans did not care about their on kind anymore." ('own' instead of 'on') "In the end, it would only end of destroying itself." ('up' instead of 'of') And I also think that you should add periods at the end of those italisized sentences in the beginning. Punctuation is a must in all such cases, I think. All in all, everything here is absolutely excellent. It could just benefit from some careful proofreading and scrutinization by you, Ake! Anyways, good work on this chapter! You truly are coming into your own as an excellent writer. If you can't be proud of any of your stories, be VERY proud of this one. It is truly a work of art! I can't wait to read the next chapter. Oh yeah, thank you for the kind words on both 'Yumi: Violent Tendencies' and 'Akai Ame: the red rain'! They really helped to make my day. I hope you post an update sooner than late! Laters! See you next review! Terryll Preston, still2twisted of FictionPress fame...
Iyron 2005-02-15 ch 1,	I've just read the first chapter and let me tell how I feel about this in one word...wow. The character Nanashi is well made and the other characters are very beleivable, almost a shame this isn't a manga/anime yet ;_; I'll get around reading the rest. This work just makes me so envious ^.^
still2twisted 2005-02-11 ch 5,	Hmm...only one or two things to add here. I do think, Ake, you should really consider using italics for your character's thoughts and possibly for any other flashback scenes that you may use in the future. The reason for this is because it helps to further separate the thoughts/flashbacks of the characters from the surrounding text, which will give the story a much smoother flow to it. Ohter than that, I don't have much else to add. The story remains engaging and just plain awesome. And the plot continues to escalate at a great pace, never too slow, never too fast. I will tell you this, Ake. You have an incredible and diverse imagination to tap into, and it is very apparent that you have done just that by writing this story. In a period of time where it seems as though every author is just copying some other author, you have managed to create something strange and original. It's great to see that there are still those who appreciate using their own sense of creativity instead of trying to take the easy way out (I am very guilty of that...LOL!). Again, I applaud your efforts and ask, as a loyal fan, that you please continue... See you next review! Terryll Preston, still2twisted of FictionPress fame...

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