A well written story you have here! In the beginning it seemed random but around the middle, it starts to show a sense of plot. Personally I liked how it was in the begining but overall this story got me stuck on my chair! Actually, I got inspired and wrote a story, which I haven't done in ages lolz! Thanks for the inspiration

this is really quite remarkable. the eerie images you create are perfect and dreamlike, as they should be in this piece. i like how the story progresses through various 'shatterings'. it seems very much a symbolic piece particularly the last image of the growing hands. you should probably read it again to find out more about what you were thinking. i'm picking up on some strong comments on the way society is going and turning into a nightmare that we can't wake up from.

~whyt forest

I'm in impress so far.

Hello- I found this very interesting. It was kind of dark and mysterious. I liked it.

all i can see this as is death, afterlife and what's beyond. again, amazing job. your use of diction and imagery are so powerful. are you a professional writer or something? lol excellent job!

-kiran