Hey! This is definitely my favourite, I love the teddy bear. And I like the repetitive lines. You are a very talented poet - please keep writing!

Hey, urm well this and 'Dreams' are very nice poems! Firstly yes it is good to take onboard the oppinions of others but don't take the comments too far into account that your originality starts drifting from the poems.

They have both grown a cirtain patina within me as if they have embedded upon me.

I love the innocent sentiment they both have, I am not sure which of the two you should enter and have noticed that this one has slightly greater audience to it. But in saying that i think it is the simplicity that attracts me to 'Dreams' as some people do not see the greater advantages simplicity may often have as in this circumstance.

Well good luck in the competition hope you do well, regards Steve

this is a great piece, i like the repetition and the images you create

wow. cool. i've felt that way... i think

The other piece is better

I deffinitely like this one better than the first "possible contest" one I read and reviewed. It really creates another world that's very beautiful and very real and very child like. I like how the bear comes to life. I'm interested in your word choir "demon". It made me stop and think, It sounds almost like a song, with the repetition of what what she might be. Spell check: I think you mean "things" instead of "thing" on the 11th line. I really like this.

No offense but if I was you I wouldn't enter this one in a contest...I think you have much better ones.

its a great piece of writing! its something we all do and shows something that we all confide in: an inademate object that takes away all the pain. you're a great poet!

this was great, really cute and touching. *line 11 "thingS" and *line 14 "giggleS"...that's all I found to correct. simple changes. no biggie. anyway, very nice. thanks for all those reviews, i really appreciate it.

Aw, that was really cute. To be innocent again...

And thank you for the review!

That's a really great piece you have here! I love the innocence portrayed by the girl and her teddy bear 3. Great job

Childhood dreams. Aww the sweetness

thanks for your review, and wow, this is going on my fav list. I love this, definitely reminds me of myself...lol...I write childhood poems too sometimes. But you did real good on this, love the end.

ANNA

wow...this poem is really good...i like how you put it as the bear being her protector

really liked this, i can remember them days when everything was so easy and innocent. but great cud really identify with this. lots of love AllyCred