Reviews for Abortion, I Have No Love For A Child

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Luke Rounda 2006-06-24 ch 1,	abuseRuns a little too long for its own good. Skip the "Sex brings doom" line if you're going for tragedy; it made me laugh out loud. There's also some awkward rhymes sprinkled in here and there, I thought. Otherwise an interesting piece juxtaposing lust and morality.
poet tree 2005-12-24 ch 1,	abuseshivers I...love this.
FuZz ZuRiFf 2005-06-29 ch 1,	abuseyou have small croked ** and it be not working well. it come too fast in the sock you play with when you play witj yourself. pornog is so bad like you. stop writing.
MeAgAiNsTtHeMuZic44 2005-06-16 ch 1,	abuseThis was amazing. Though I do not agree with the view that abortion is always right, I am blown away by your writing skills. Your vocabulary is unbelievable and this is so emotional. Please keep writing.
Eada Nami 2005-05-08 ch 1,	abuseWow, that was kinda gross, put the baby in a jar? With the dead eyes and no breath. I shuttered even though it's hot out. Very descriptive and meaningful. Are you a pro-life or not? Check out some of my stories and poems, from Mary out of the three.
Infinite Abyss 2005-04-26 ch 1,	abuseGreat poem.
Katterree Fengari 2005-04-03 ch 1,	abuseum, it is good, but you dragged it out way too long...in my opinion.But I'm too much all for the "short and sweet" ideal"Burry the corpse, burry the baby." is supposed to be "bury" as "burry" means 'prickly'
grim-dreamer 2005-03-15 ch 1,	abuseBleak, black and kind of good. Had me feeling quite annoyed with you, but I suppose you do have a point. The part that got to my stomach were the lines 'Don't worry, we'll scrape that baby out'. I think the poem goes on for too long, though. It could be a little more concise. And why is the information on my bio 'very funny'? I am telling the truth.
wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-03-01 ch 1,	abuselike all of your writing- intelligent, different, an exposing social commentary.
INTP 2005-02-20 ch 1,	abuseI love black comedy. And to think, people try to find a concrete meaning in this. I think you love to spite people, but I might be wrong. Which isn't often. Anyway, technically, this is genius. You've got the internal rhyme in there with the sometimes steady soemtimes scattered end rhyme, the repetition isn't bashed into my head like some adolescent who doesn't know how to emphasize something without repeating it Rainman-esque a thousand times, and there's some pretty imagery placed in there sporadically. You seem like a really cynical person, and cynicism is the only quality people need in this world to really enjoy it. Especially to enjoy abortion.
Eboniccinderella 2005-02-16 ch 1,	abusehm...I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that you are against abortion and this is just lyrical sarcasm?Well,not bad.
frantic writer 2005-02-11 ch 1,	abuseto me, paradox makes more sense than cold logic.thanks for your assinine review.
Tool Fanatic 2005-02-07 ch 1,	abuseWhile many people write trash about their pitiful, so-called "love" lives, emotional problems (woe are they), and cliche trash which is seen as "abstract and totally awesome" just because in actuality it makes no goddamn sense, people like you write something that can really move one, some to tears: "We'llkeep it in a jar,And hold hands and walk out, smiling.Your pretty green eyes,Such smooth tender thighs,My dear you have such pretty green eyes,That are mimicked flawlessly in the face behind that jar. Dead eyes.That infant form floating in formaldehyde so far,It’s near to me as I breathe, it does not breathe.As I see, it does not see.But I’m me, my decisions are free." Dead eyes.All eyes are dead.Yet all that those who love care about are eyes.And then they realize it was only a fringe benefit, only to reject the truth because it isn't "nice."
sarcastic-student 2005-02-03 ch 1,	abuseWhere do I begin? A wonderful mix of talent and emotion. I loved the lines, "My dear you have such pretty green eyes, That are mimicked flawlessly in the face behind that jar," and "We're like pale Gods in this room." Very moving and honest. You were able to make your point passionately, without ranting. Well done!
epiphanies 2005-02-03 ch 1,	abuseOh my goodness. Oh my God. This is so powerful and so strong... I don't really have words, so I'll use yours. "From sex comes pleasure and nothing more.We’re all the hedonistic **.We make the binding of the law.Steel and iron knives make you sore.That dig deep inside of you and make you shoutDon't worry, we'll scrape that baby out.But we’ll have a café late next door,And forget about it all, and make love on the floor." This is so distinct and passionate... you said that my story should be read in schools? This poem should be read to the world.

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